Children of the First

Chapter 23, right on schedule!

This is my second chapter without the benefit of an editor (aside from myself, of course) or even a first reader, so any feedback will be much appreciated. Of course, I can always count on Pan to catch my typos, but I want to hear what you all think—aside from that I'm a pretty crappy speller.

Thanks for reading, guys. You are metal. Continue to rock. \m/
-Alex

Well, there we go. Finally. Sorry I forgot to post it yesterday. I forgot everything yesterday. This is a long chapter that follows straight from chapter 21, so you might want to start from 21 again... Since it's been so long since it was posted... Sorry about that. Thanks for reading and for being so awesome and patient and awesome.
Rock on. \m/